Scorched Earth
Subtitle A Future History of Planet Earth
Published 1980
Word count
112,853
Excerpt
e. Once great cities were wiped clean from the face of the
earth. Those that were spared stood like majestic mountains. With
time, they also crumbled away, turning into gigantic mounds that were
loosely held together by rusty girders, brittle concrete and broken
glass.
Bands of strange-looking humans roamed the face of the land foraging
for the scarce and much-valued commodities of food and fresh water.
In the years following the deluge, the surface dwelling survivors died
out from exposure to radiation and to the adverse climactic conditions
that were inherited from the global fall out.
The progeny of the survivors became strange in appearance and behaviour
until they all became new forms of humans, evolved from mutants, to
small hybrid races which soon became as distinct and individual as
those humans that lived in the late Twentieth Century. The
amalgamation of these races found that great tension had formed between
them, due to their differences in appearances and forms of speech, and
so they b
I couldn't finish this - so bad!
Came back to warn other away with this review.
The prose was very florid and descriptive unfortunately the story wasn't. It read like the bastard child of the bible, planet of the apes and any number of poorly written fantasy novels. Too many characters whom we know too little about. Whole plotlines conceived then waved away with little more than a phrase. A reliance on magic over science. Pages and pages of "so and so begat so and so who had twins and begat the father of so and so" etc. Really stuff no-one would care about.
Clumsy phrasing such as this gem: "the radiation caused the animals to mutate. Eagles grew as tall as trees"
Just you because you can string enough words together doesn't mean you have to write a book. The acheivment in writing a book is in telling the story not how many words you can pump out. There was no real story to Scorched Earth. It made no sense.
Hello and thanks to all who downloaded Scorched Earth, thus far. Hopefully you will hit my books again and see this new request.
It seems like I have a potential agent to handle my work, and Scorched Earth appears to have some strong interest.
To that end, I humbly request a brief critique of my novel by all who have decided to read it. This will, undoubtedly, help me in my publishing endeavours.
Let me know if you like or even if you don't like it. Let me know what works and what doesn't, and any suggetions for improving the work. For all those responding to this request I will beg the future publisher to allow mention of your name in the acknowledgements, for your helpful criticisms.
Thanks
Walter
Hi,
I'm the author of the novel Scorched Earth.
I truly hope you enjoy reading it, and I remember that when I wrote it - back in 1979-80 - I enjoyed committing it to paper.
I would greatly appreciate any and all criticisms regarding my work, as it can only serve to help me improve the work for any future publication.
Being somewhat modest I leave the Rating at the middle button and let you decide.
Walter - walter.petrovic@3web.net
