The Demon Girl

Published: 2010
Language: English
Wordcount: 76,285 / 205 pg
Flesch-Kincaid Reading Ease: 87.7
LoC Category: PR
Downloads: 40,953
Added to site: 2010.11.02
mnybks.net#: 29439
License: by-nd
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Rae Wilder has problems. Plunged into a world of dark magic, fierce creatures and ritual sacrifice, she is charged with a guarding a magical amulet. Rae finds herself beaten up, repeatedly, and forced to make a choice: to live and die human, or embrace her birth-right and wield magics that could turn her into something wicked, a force of nature nothing can control.

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he truth. Let me go, you don't understand what will happen. My brothers-"

The Lord Cleric punched her. Her head flew back and a spray of blood wet the dry mud and spattered over the leaves concealing me. Face wet with tears and whimpering, she tried to crawl toward the trees and dragged up clumps of earth with her fingernails.

"You must let me go." The words sounded muffled, like she had a mouthful of something foul.

The Lord Cleric executed a neat half turn and stamped on her thigh. There was a sharp snap, like I'd picked up a twig and yanked on the ends until the fibers split apart and cracked open. The fairy's leg buckled into an unnatural shape and she screamed. The sound was guttural, a direct translation of pain to sound. I slapped a hand over my mouth to smother my own shriek. Not because of the broken bone, I'd seen and heard tons of those, but because I'd caught the Lord Clerics profile and recognized the handsome face. The Lord Cleric dragged the fairy back into the centre of th

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Average Rating of 3.8 from 28 reviews: ****
2013.04.20
Philipp
*....

"The Demon Girl" feels as if you were reading "Twilight".
It's not bad but it's just not the right book for me.

2012.08.22
Susan
*....

Wow. Good potential for a great story but never hits it's mark. Too much information withheld from the main character and so much secrecy that I've lost interest but will finish it because I always finish the books I start.....no matter how painful it can be sometimes. The editing is some of the worse I've come across making the story hard to follow at times. My recommendation to someone thinking about reading this book would be to not bother with it. I just learned that the story continues in another book. It'll have to continue without me. :-(

2012.02.28
gibel
*****

An excellent fantasy story! I wish the sequel “The Demon Day” was available in free ebook so I could learn what happens next.

2011.10.12
Brittnie
*****

This site is amazing. So helpful. It gets me by in the hard times I am having.

2011.08.17
Maddiii
*****

OMG, in love with this book! I couldn't put it down! I hope she keeps writing. I also hope she gets a new editor there were so many selling and punctual errors! XD love it.

2011.06.30
ley
*****

I like it. It makes me wondering all the time

2011.06.18
Nana
*....

Very much in need of a good editor, especially in the beginning where the author insists on introducing a new character almost every page. I also found the main characters not terrible likeable, which ruins a book for me.

2011.06.08
porcha williams
***..

i have read demon girl and the sequel i think they were both great books i couldnt pull my head out of the stories i wish some things could have been a little different but everyone love for things to turn out the way they would like it too in books or movies for that matter anyway im looking forward to your next books i also love how the books were not a short story keep up the good work

The only thing it needs to become an amazing book is a good editor, as others have already commented. The story feels refreshing; it is original enough for me to appreciate. Although it does hold elements that may seem to be overused nowadays, such as vampires, these are used well and taken a little further from the cliché. The characters are round enough to be enjoyable.
Again, the problem with this book is the incredible amount of grammatical and orthographic errors. These often caused me confusion, and made me want to stop reading altogether. The book was only saved by its good story, all because the author has great potential; she knows how to engage the reader!

2011.05.20
grimo1re
*****

Excellent book. Great story, great characters and a sense of humour in there, even.

Book does not editing but not enough to stop me from wanting more.

2011.05.06
boojum
***..

A good tale, with some interesting twists on an old theme. Unfortunately it was spoilt for me by very poor editing. In places I was left wondering who was talking to whom, and wrestling with odd punctuation which spoilt the narrative flow. There is a very good story in there, trying to get out. I notice that there is a sequel due out shortly - please, Ms Fletcher, get a professional editor/proofreader to look over it first!

2011.05.01
normb
**...

This is like a romance novel with annoying characters constantly thwarting each other. The protagonist can't decide whether she is angry or happy about turning into a fairy. The dialogue is ponderous and confusing. On many occasions, information is withheld from a character by another for no apparent reason. And just like in a romance novel there are more or less constant descriptions of the protagonist's and other character's bodily responses to their volatile emotions. I got really tired of hearing "she felt her heart pounding or "he hummed with tension" or "air became a physical thing as it wrapped around my throat" etc..." Practically every page.
Pretty good story line and world creation, but falls way short of it's potential in my view because of the soap opera style dialogue.

2011.04.27
bhold
***..

Enjoyable story but this text is badly in need of proof reading and editing. I was somewhat surprised and disappointed at the author's portrayal Rae. Gifted with amazing strength and speed, she seems to wilt physically, mentally, and emotionally whenever she encounters an attractive male or is placed under a stressful situation. Reminiscent of the 1950's and earlier cinematic stereotyped portrayals of women - where a good swoon is just around the corner. Fortunately Rae toughens up toward the end of the book and hopefully this continues in the next book.

2011.04.22
grimo1re
****.

Loved it, can't wait to read the next one :)

2011.04.19
Jamie
****.

Great story. I'm not usually a fantasy fan though I like good scifi, but this had me hooked from the first chapter. Couldn't resist the title. Keep writing!

2011.04.02
lanja
*****

OMG best book ever. while i was reading i couldnt stop. the characters and the story were amazing. there should be a movie about it!!!!!!! cant wait for demon day!!!!

2011.04.02
emily
*****

i loved LOVED looooved this book so much that i started reading it that day and finished it at 4 in the morning the next day! i want rae to be with TOMAS sooo flipping bad.

2011.04.02
Athena
*****

I loved this book and finished it in 4 hours. Can't wait for the sequel to come out.

2011.03.24
Ali
****.

This story is really great. Many grammatical errors, but the story itself is really great to delve into.

2011.03.21
Foney
***..

The main idea is there, however the writing is HORRIBLE! This book could have been a best seller, however due to the lack of help it is pretty much crap.

2011.03.19
kim
*****

Loved this book! Found myself unable to keep my nose out. Can't wait until the next instalment. this could be the next "Twlight saga"

2011.02.05
Jon West
****.

A great read. If you don't like this, you probably are not a fan of the genre. Character development of the protagonist is excellent. I would have like more development of fairy-boy and vampire-boy, but that would be a different book. I agree with earlier comments that a good editor could have put a bit of polish on this work, but it did not detract from my enjoyment. Please keep them coming Penelope!

2011.02.02
Laura
****.

Was completely enthralled by the storyline. Characters are well developed and totally believable. However I felt that the action sequences could have benefited from a clearer writing style, sometimes it's not completely obvious who is talking or what is happening to everyone in the fight scenes.

Overall a fantastic first book from the author. Will be reading the next instalment.

2011.01.04
T OReilly
*****

Read this book in widescreen, technicolour. Fantastic.
I loved all the characters,
Great story line, could not put it down.
Looking forward to A Demon Day

2010.12.29
mimi
*****

Great book, but the literature is awful.
The author is obviously very talented, but the sub/copy editor is obviously not.
The author should really think about hiring a competent editor.

2010.12.25
sabina
***..

this book had so much potential, but it didn't live up to my expectations. i stopped reading about 80 pages in. worth a try though.

2010.12.08
julia pearce
*****

Loved every second of reading this book. Found I was reading at every opportuity. Great Fantastic Magical. Can't wait till Demon Day.

2010.11.08
apidi
***..

A stylish fantasy, with lots of glamour, sex and violence and some well-drawn characters. Perhaps a touch of 'Avatar' as charismatic demons rush around a mysterious, potent forest environment. The writing can lack precision, however, which means the many action and movement sequences sometimes lack clarity. The book also badly needs the services of a competent copy editor.


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