The Demon Girl

The Demon Girl


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The Demon Girl by Penelope Fletcher







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The Demon Girl


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Rae Wilder has problems. Plunged into a world of dark magic, fierce creatures and ritual sacrifice, she is charged with a guarding a magical amulet. Rae finds herself beaten up, repeatedly, and forced to make a choice: to live and die human, or embrace her birth-right and wield magics that could turn her into something wicked, a force of nature nothing can control.

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he truth. Let me go, you don't understand what will happen. My brothers-"

The Lord Cleric punched her. Her head flew back and a spray of blood wet the dry mud and spattered over the leaves concealing me. Face wet with tears and whimpering, she tried to crawl toward the trees and dragged up clumps of earth with her fingernails.

"You must let me go." The words sounded muffled, like she had a mouthful of something foul.

The Lord Cleric executed a neat half turn and stamped on her thigh. There was a sharp snap, like I'd picked up a twig and yanked on the ends until the fibers split apart and cracked open. The fairy's leg buckled into an unnatural shape and she screamed. The sound was guttural, a direct translation of pain to sound. I slapped a hand over my mouth to smother my own shriek. Not because of the broken bone, I'd seen and heard tons of those, but because I'd caught the Lord Clerics profile and recognized the handsome face. The Lord Cleric dragged the fairy back into the centre of th

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An excellent fantasy story! I wish the sequel “The Demon Day” was available in free ebook so I could learn what happens next.
OMG, in love with this book! I couldn't put it down! I hope she keeps writing. I also hope she gets a new editor there were so many selling and punctual errors! XD love it.
Very much in need of a good editor, especially in the beginning where the author insists on introducing a new character almost every page. I also found the main characters not terrible likeable, which ruins a book for me.
The only thing it needs to become an amazing book is a good editor, as others have already commented. The story feels refreshing; it is original enough for me to appreciate. Although it does hold elements that may seem to be overused nowadays, such as vampires, these are used well and taken a little further from the cliché. The characters are round enough to be enjoyable.
Again, the problem with this book is the incredible amount of grammatical and orthographic errors. These often caused me confusion, and made me want to stop reading altogether. The book was only saved by its good story, all because the author has great potential; she knows how to engage the reader!
i have read demon girl and the sequel i think they were both great books i couldnt pull my head out of the stories i wish some things could have been a little different but everyone love for things to turn out the way they would like it too in books or movies for that matter anyway im looking forward to your next books i also love how the books were not a short story keep up the good work
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Excellent book. Great story, great characters and a sense of humour in there, even.

Book does not editing but not enough to stop me from wanting more.
A good tale, with some interesting twists on an old theme. Unfortunately it was spoilt for me by very poor editing. In places I was left wondering who was talking to whom, and wrestling with odd punctuation which spoilt the narrative flow. There is a very good story in there, trying to get out. I notice that there is a sequel due out shortly - please, Ms Fletcher, get a professional editor/proofreader to look over it first!
This is like a romance novel with annoying characters constantly thwarting each other. The protagonist can't decide whether she is angry or happy about turning into a fairy. The dialogue is ponderous and confusing. On many occasions, information is withheld from a character by another for no apparent reason. And just like in a romance novel there are more or less constant descriptions of the protagonist's and other character's bodily responses to their volatile emotions. I got really tired of hearing "she felt her heart pounding or "he hummed with tension" or "air became a physical thing as it wrapped around my throat" etc..." Practically every page.
Pretty good story line and world creation, but falls way short of it's potential in my view because of the soap opera style dialogue.